Jose Bouliouris: Just a minor note- be careful using words like "astonish" too much. Be sure to pick up an English Thesaurus or use Thesaurus.com because there are a LOT of words in English, several of which mean the exact same thing and using them can keep a conversation or essay/sentences good and fresh! ;)-I really astonished that Phelps got eight gold medals in Olympic game."I am really astonished that Phelps got eight gold medals in the Olympics!"Other variations would be: "I'm astonished that Phelps got 8 gold medals in the Olympic games!"*With a word like "astonished" you're probably going to want an exclamation point at the end of that sentence.-We all astonished at the earth quack with nuclear pollution in Japan.This one is tough because it doesn't sound like a complete sentence and it doesn't really make sense. You would want an "are" between "We" and "all" - "astonished" is not a good word for this sentence, I would suggest "shocked" or "surprised"... "qua! ck" is the sound a duck makes and "earthquake" is one word. I would say, "The earthquake surprised us all!" or "The earthquake shocked us all!" or "The earthquake astonished us all!" Because the earthquake and nuclear pollution seem unrelated I would make that a separate sentence altogether. I'm thinking by the word "with" you meant "and" which means "also" - "with" is a little different. Maybe: "We're shocked at the amount of nuclear pollution in Japan." -People have to astonish at nature."People should be amazed by nature.""People should be astonished by nature."Using the word have is harsh- it's like you're being bossy almost saying they HAVE TO do what you say. -Now many countries began to attach great importance to primary education."Now, many countries hold primary education in the highest regard.""Now, many countries have begun to hold primary education in high regard.""Primary education is of great importance to many countries now."-People should not only attr! ibute global warming to human activities because long time ago! global was already got warmer and warmer when human hadn't appeared."People should not blame global warming solely on human activity. Global warming has been around long before human existence.""Global warming should not be attributed only to human activity because it was going on before humans ever existed."-Many people attribute the successful movie PIRATE of CARIBBEAN to Jack Sparrow’s sense of humor is like a gift that no body could ever learn."Many people attribute the success of the movie Pirates of the Caribbean to Jack Sparrow's (Johnny Depp's) sense of humor that cannot be matched."-We shouldn't avaricious the money which is not belong to ourselves.*In this sentence you're using avaricious like a verb, but it is an adjective."We shouldn't be avaricious towards money that does not belong to us.""We should not be avaricious of money that does not belong to us."But simply "We should not be avaricious." Period. -After the civil war, American finally did away with! slavery."After the Civil War, Americans finally did away with slavery."-No one can do away with freedom in Jack Sparrow's heart and mind."No one can do away with the freedom in Jack Sparrow's heart and mind."-Being banned from watching adult video for teenager the probability of feticide has been greatly decreased."The probability of feticide among teenagers has greatly decreased since the ban on adult videos.""The ban on adult videos has drastically lowered the number of feticides in teenagers."GOOD LUCK!...Show more
Antone Bual: "I'm a English learner. I wrote some sentences, could you please correct them.Thanks?"24.-I AM really astonished that Phelps got (received) eight gold medals in THE Olympic gameS.-We all WERE astonished WITH the earthQUAKE AND nuclear pollution in Japan.25.-People have to BE astonish (amazed) BY nature.26.-Now many countries began to attach great importance to primary education.27.-People should not only attribute global warming to human ac! tivities because A long time ago THE PLANET was already GETTING warmer ! and warmer AND humanS DIDN'T EXSIST.-Many people attribute the successful movie: "PIRATES of CARIBBEAN" to Jack Sparrow’s sense of humor, IT'S a gift that no body could ever learn (mimic).28.-We shouldn't avariciousLY WANT money which DOES not belong to US.29.-After the civil war, AMERICA finally did away with (replace did away with: abolished) slavery.-No one can do away with freedom in Jack Sparrow's heart and mind.30.-Being banned from watching adult videoS AS A teenager, and the probability of FETICIDE? (This isn't a word...) has been greatly decreased.I did exactly as you wanted, I corrected the sentences which you created... showing any mistakes. Good Job with your sentences, keep up the good work!...Show more
Oscar Wieland: 24. I was astonished that Phelps received eight gold medals at the Olympic games. We were astonished at the nuclear pollution after the earth quake in Japan.25. People are in awe of nature. 26. Many countries have begun to attach ! great importance to primary education.27. People should not only attribute global warming to human activity, but also to nature, because long ago, before humans appeared the earth was warmer than now.28. We shouldn't be avaricious, especially with money that does not belong to us.29. After the Civil War, America finally did away with slavery. No one can take away the freedom in Jack Sparrow's heart and mind.30. Teenagers being banned from watchin adult videos, has greatly reduced the probability of feticide. Don't know what feticide is, but hope this helps....Show more
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